Journal 4/22

Today Chimuanya and I worked on the first draft of her research paper. I was surprised when I first read it because it differed dramatically from the outline, but was impressed by the fluidity with which she incorporated a multitude of different sources into her argument. The main issues that we worked on in class were: -vague wording -paragraph rearrangement (bulking up or paring down) -formatting -grammar. She understood the issues she needs to work on and will re-submit a second draft for next week.