Today Kailin and I worked on improving Essay 1. We worked mainly on sentence-level details:
- making phrases more clear and specific
- avoiding unclear syntactical constructions (eg. gerunds)
- getting citations to feel more smooth in the context of her argument
- adding in transitions so the sentences and the ideas carried within them flow nicely from one to another
She will continue polishing up the essay this week, and then we’ll move on to Essay 2.